Revised paragraph

This is my revised paragraph, I mainly played with the introductory and concluding sentences, and I think it's better now. The final sentence may seem like it is a new claim, but I revised this with the idea that this would be only a part of a research paper as a whole. So although that sentence seems like it's leaving a major loose end for the paragraph, it was actually meant as a transition to the next paragraph, so bear that in mind when you read the paragraph.


Marquez makes a statement about the nature of humans by using the people’s reaction to both the spider lady and the old man. “The admission to see her[spider-lady] was not only less than the admission to see the angel, but people were permitted to ask her all manner of questions about her absurd state and to examine her up and down so that no one would ever doubt the truth of her horror.”(Marquez 454) This sentence suggests that the only reason the spider-lady is more popular than the “angel” is that people can fully examine and understand her. After the arrival of the spider-lady the old man becomes ignored and everyone goes to see the carnival. Furthermore the spider-lady has a concrete reason why she contrasts with the preexisting idea that spider-ladies should not exist - she had disobeyed her parents. On the other hand, the “angel” has no reason why he should exist in the world where angels are considered supernatural, and thus he is rejected. Marquez does this to exemplify that humans are inherently unwilling to believe things that contradict their core values even with concrete tangible proof; he shows that the people are only willing to believe things that they can logically work through, and will even reject things that they can see and feel. This idea is something that can be extrapolated to question the phenomenon of faith and religion in humans.